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I still think this could use improvement, but here it is anyway.

Title: Sestina: John
Fandom: Stargate: Atlantis
Characters: John/team/gen
Rating: PG
Word Count: 500
Summary: John finds a home.
Spoilers: "Rising."
Disclaimer: Neither the canon nor the fanon that inspired this are mine.
A/N: I'm glad to have this finished, finally. Big thanks to beta-readers, especially [ profile] roga and [ profile] jadesfire2808, for encouraging me not to give up a few months ago and for pointing out the clunky parts.

When John first steps through the gate into Atlantis...  )

Feedback and concrit are very welcome.
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My latest effort to pull out of the "everything I touch turns to crap" mode that I've been in for the last several weeks is to try some more sestinas without worrying about how tight or original they are. It seems to be working. The one I started last night about John Sheppard has stalled halfway through, but here's another I managed to write today.

For those of you unfamiliar with the show: It's Rodney McKay during "The Hive," the second half of a two-parter in Season Two where spoilery plot summary for those who want background, even though you probably don't need it. )

I like this one because it uses the end words to return to the same thought over and over, rather than inventing an entirely new meaning or context each time. Characters on drugs help, apparently.

Concrit welcome!

ETA: x-posted to [ profile] sga_flashfic for the Wordless Challenge, here.

Title: An Unanticipated Side Effect of Dosing Oneself with Wraith Enzyme to Deliver an Important Message
Character: Rodney/team gen
Rating: PG
Word Count: 513
A/N: Many thanks to [ profile] daasgrrl, [ profile] elynittria and [ profile] synn for concrit.

...what was he saying again? )

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- Sestina #1: House post-infarction
- Sestina #2: "A Typical Day in Diagnostics"
- Sestina #3: "Breaking the Cycle"

Title: The Truth in Dreams
Character: Gregory House, with House/Wilson undertones
Rating: PG
Word Count: 362
Prompts: truth (from [ profile] daasgrrl), Vicodin, Wilson, dreams, leg, puzzles
Spoilers: Vague for "Meaning" and "Cane and Able"
A/N: This ended up veering far away from what I intended. I'm a little sorry I substituted "dreams" for a previous prompt; it...cheapens the rest of the words. ETA: Have been overruled on that point. Thanks, guys. *love*

Most nights, his leg allows him a few hours of solid sleep. And he dreams. )

x-posting to [ profile] housefic and [ profile] house_wilson.

Thoughts very welcome.
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This was the first sestina of all of them that I started, and it's still not finished. It was supposed to be a breathless sort of poem about the night Sirius nearly got Snape killed, bracketed by the somber reflections of current-day Lupin, but it kept getting stuck the further I went, all tangled up in itself, trying to say too much in too little space. I wrote, I wrestled, I deleted, I wrote, it got stuck again, and again, and again. I still don't like the last filled-in stanza, and to fix that, the one before it has to be tweaked. Here it sits, forlorn.

Character: Remus Lupin
Rating: PG-13 for language and mentions of violence
Summary: Remus drinks his potion and remembers.
Disclaimer: Not mine.
Prompts: Tame, reject, detention, guilt, sour, waiting (from [ profile] thewlisian_afer)

In his younger days, the waiting was the worst part. )
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- Sestina #1: House post-infarction
- Sestina #2: "A Typical Day in Diagnostics"

Title: Breaking the Cycle
Character: James Wilson
Rating: R
Word Count: 400
Prompts: whispers (from [ profile] daasgrrl), pound (from [ profile] thewlisian_afer), part, wife, friend, lies
A/N: With thanks to [ profile] synn for looking over draft after draft and saying each was fine, even if I didn't believe her. :)

After two divorces, it's happening again. )
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Sestina the second, also known as Fun with Alliteration. Slightly different tone from the last one.

Title: A Typical Day in Diagnostics
Characters: Main Cast of House; ~Chase POV
Rating: PG
Word Count: 330
Prompts: Chase, House, Foreman, Cameron, Cuddy, Wilson
A/N: This is the proper/standard format for the end words, if anyone's curious. Thanks to [ profile] synn for feedback and [ profile] firestorm717 for the synonym.

Patient's dying again. )
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So those sets of six prompts I requested back in September? The big secret is that I've been playing around with some sestinas. (Yes, I am that much of a geek.) For those of you who aren't familiar with the term, it's a type of poem consisting of seven stanzas where the same six words appear at the ends of the lines in a different order in each of the first six stanzas, and then two of the words appear in each line of the final three-line stanza. There are more rules -- explains in detail -- but that's the gist of it. That may sound confusing, but once you read one you'll get it.

Irony of ironies, of the five poems I've got going for the first round (four House, one Harry Potter), I ended up using only one full prompt set from what everyone supplied, plus a few words scattered here and there. Since I'd never written poetry!fic nor a "normal" sestina before, it was easiest to write with simple prompts closely related to the characters. If you gave me prompts, don't be disappointed -- at least one set from everyone will be turned into a poem or ficlet.

ETA: For the poetry-phobic among you: It's non-rhyming, and it reads like a story. There are just line breaks in odd places and a lot of repeated words.

Okay! First one up:

Character: Gregory House
Rating: R for language
Word Count: 450
Prompts: painkiller, Stacy, fuck, nerves, dead, laugh
Spoilers: "Three Stories"
A/N: To quote Eddie Izzard, the infrastructure's fucked. In other words, screwed up the order on this one. But I liked the stanzas enough to leave it alone.
A/N 2: A University of Northern Iowa webpage mentions the obsession that underlies the sestina because of its constant return to the same words. I think that's what makes this form so fitting for House.

Being crippled against one's will is in fact worse than being dead, he concludes. )

Feedback is love. That includes concrit. Considering there will be more of these, advice on what works and what doesn't would be appreciated.


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