I tried to work in a line or two afterwards about the fact that it happened in dreams and in reality, but it got too complicated.

Hee - I actually think it's better this way even if you could have done it. I think if you know your canon (as House people do), that part is so obvious that it works better with just the implications.

Also to say I'm glad you 'fixed' the formatting. I read your reasoning, but I still found it terribly distracting, personally. I didn't mention it because topaz_eyes had already and I thought it was actually just an error. From you, I should have known better *g*.

And synesthesia, yes. *rueful smile* I tried to get the word into the poem

I was amused, just because I know how tempting it is to demonstrate one's vocabulary. I think you made the right decision :)