Date: Dec. 31st, 2006 05:42 pm (UTC)
I was going for the removal of 'his' - if the Vicodin is 'his' then Wilson's just being annoying, keeping him from getting what's rightfully his. Although this is the way House seems to feel, the truth about addiction is that you do not own the drug; the drug owns you, and I think just by removing this little word you could suggest some of this. House might think of the Vicodin as being rightfully his but deep down he must know that he is in its control.

My promblem with 'that can be attributed to his leg' was more that there are too many syllables and it interrupts the flow a little. I like the idea of ending on 'leg', and your solution is perfect.

It's interesting you should say that this poem was difficult. What I love about it is the way you pack so many ideas and emotions into a short space, but sa what you want to say clearly and neatly with a light, flowing touch. It's not just about House being in denial about loving Wilson - there's so much morethat you suggest and hint at and reading the poem is very satisfying because I could spend hours analysing it. But Wilson is in every verse and so it seems like although it's not all about Wilson, these things are related to him in someway - the vicodin and his leg and Wilson are all tied up in his thoughts and I love that.

Ack. You could have another megamegapost about all the things that you've implied and why it's just so canon and so fantastic. I honestly think this is the best poem you've written, even though I love the first. So have confidence!

FInally, do you mind if I friend your journal so I can find your next poepms/fics/etc? You seem like an interesting person to talk to and I do love me a good debate.
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