bironic: Neil Perry gazing out a window at night (house wilson slash)
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Title: A Helping Hand
Fandom: House M.D.
Pairing: House/Wilson
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: 8,670
Summary: Wilson has an unusually rough day and House decides (somewhat despite himself) to help. Things go further than he planned.
Disclaimer: Not mine in any way, alas.
A/N: Takes place between "Forever" and "No Reason." Spoilers through "Forever."
- Written for [livejournal.com profile] slashfest for [livejournal.com profile] michelleann68's prompt, Wilson loses 4 patients in one day and wants to be left alone, House has other plans.
- Thank you to everyone who offered tips and listened to me worry about keeping things in-character. And thank you to wrongdiagnosis.com for being an invaluable resource. Unbetaed; concrit welcome.


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Part One


House walked down the hall with a force that made the muscles of his right hand flutter, threatening to cramp, with each lurch onto the cane, his stubborn erection throbbing in his jeans at each step. His hand slipped on the polished wood; he half hoped the thing would slide from his grip, send him tumbling, so he'd have an excuse for a violent outburst. It didn't.

He pushed open the door to the men's room and didn't break stride until he stood at the sink. He leaned the cane against the counter, turned on the hot water and washed his hands for longer than necessary with a generous dollop of soap. He grabbed several paper towels and dried off, then dunked the damp paper under the faucet and wiped his cane clean. When he'd used the towels to turn off the tap and chucked the wad into the garbage slot, he stared at himself in the mirror.

His reflection didn't offer any answers.

He turned around and limped to the urinal. Within the confines of the curved porcelain, he opened his jeans with both hands and eased out his cock, looking down at it as though it belonged to someone else.

There was no way he'd be able to piss in this state. Damn it. Damn Wilson and damn himself and his stupid idea. His hand tightened—he clenched his jaw and squinted against the urge to let his eyelids flutter shut—and he began to tug at himself, just a little, moving the skin slightly up and down in his fist, stifling a groan at the sheer relief despite being alone in the room.

As he touched himself, grip too firm and pace too slow, an all-too-vivid image coalesced in his mind: Wilson, head back, eyes closed, sweating, clutching at him, choking out his name. That sound he'd made when he'd come. The slippery skin of his dick in House's hand. House tried to substitute some of his usual fantasies in its place—Cameron doing a strip-tease in his bedroom—Cuddy finally losing her temper, shoving him into a chair in her office and mounting him—but it was no good; the fresh memory of Wilson kept intruding. He imagined he could still feel Wilson's wet mouth on his neck.

His strokes strengthening, he leaned forward onto his left arm and pivoted slightly so he was standing as he had in Wilson's office. He was definitely getting harder. If he hurried, he would be able to finish, clean up and make it back before the other man suspected anything more than a need to calm his nerves.

The bathroom door opened.

House dropped his chin to his chest and slapped the wall, stilling his hand and swallowing a curse.

"Hey," Wilson said, quietly. House didn't reply.

Wilson walked over to the sink. House stood still and stiff, moving nothing but his eyes, seeing nothing but the crusted plumbing joints and the crumbling bleach tablet in the drain. He listened to Wilson wash and dry his hands and possibly his face. He couldn't pee and he didn't feel like trying to force himself back into his jeans, so he waited. Maybe Wilson would leave without another word, without inquiring as to why House was standing there holding his dick as though he were suddenly too shy to urinate with someone else in the room.

Of course Wilson didn't leave. But he didn't speak either. Instead, he crossed the few feet from the sink to House's urinal, hard rubber heels brushing against the floor. His steps sounded cautious. House was reminded of a gamekeeper approaching a wounded animal on the savannah.

Playing the part of the cornered prey, House did not move. Not even when Wilson stood right behind him. Not even when he touched House's waist.

Only when Wilson reached around and placed his right hand over his own on his cock (Jesus, his skin really was remarkably soft) did House close his eyes. The fingers of his left hand curled against the cool wall.

Wilson rested his lips on House's shoulder. "Show me," he said.

If House had drawn a line earlier with his demand for lube, then Wilson was drawing another one now. This boundary, however, seemed fraught with greater implications since it lacked the rationalization of one friend helping another after a difficult day.

Then Wilson nudged his hand, and the resultant surge of arousal pushed his own hand forward, and then back, and then forward again, pushed him across the line into territory too terrifying to contemplate.

Good thing he wasn't capable of much deep thought at the moment.

He was capable of some thought, though. Strange how Wilson—his hands and breath and body heat and steady gaze (which House couldn't follow but knew was directed at either his face or their hands)—the fact of him there, watching and participating, preserved House's self-awareness during an act that usually allowed him to put his brain on pause.

It also, he noticed, pleasantly intensified his arousal to a level his more potent fantasies and the occasional girls he hired were rarely able to achieve. As an experiment he let himself again remember the look on Wilson's face when he'd orgasmed, and felt his hips push forward slightly in response.

Stranger yet, then, to be turned on by fantasizing about the person currently helping one stroke one's penis.

Wilson didn't say anything when House's hips moved nor when he relaxed back, just kept his hand on his and continued to accompany him in rubbing his dick in slow, short jerks. It had to have been awkward for Wilson to use his non-dominant hand, but he followed House's lead without any apparent difficulty. In fact, he seemed to be very good at this, dextrous and sure, holding on tightly enough to remind House that he was there but loosely enough not to affect his grip.

His mind slipping into its more typical complacent masturbatory meanderings, House wondered whether Wilson's skill resulted from natural talent, private practice or application on others. Wives and mistresses and patients not enough for you to keep your hands off yourself, Jimmy? Or are there some after-school activities with the other boys you haven't told me about?

As if he'd heard House mocking him, Wilson shifted his hand, nudging his fingertips against House's knuckles. House spread his fingers and Wilson slid his own between them.

The doubled surface area and ribbed sensation had an incredible effect on his erection. Breath and strokes quickening, House lowered his head and found himself mesmerized by the sight of their joined fingers—one set pink, smooth and immaculately manicured, the other creased and cane-calloused and sprinkled with graying hair—moving in tandem back and forth along his dark, engorged cock.

His higher reasoning was unquestionably shutting down now. It was all he could do to stare at their hands and concentrate on finding the rhythm that would carry him to climax.

When they had held steady for a few minutes, Wilson flexed his hand again. "I've got it," he said, and stroked his thumb across the fleshy part of House's hand between thumb and forefinger—a small gesture of affection that would have startled House half an hour ago but which he accepted now without much difficulty.

House understood that Wilson wanted him to let go, let him take over, but he couldn't bring himself to do it. To stand there and let Wilson touch him unaided—bring him to orgasm—

House's hand spasmed and tightened its grip. He kept stroking. With luck, Wilson would take the hint.

On the contrary, his companion pressed up against him—cheekbone to shoulder, chest to back, crotch to ass—and slid his left arm further around House's ribs so his palm rested flat against his stomach. House closed his eyes, heart thudding.

Wilson almost-kissed his shoulder again. "Let me," he murmured. "I've got you."

House would have cracked some joke about training wheels or physiotherapy if he hadn't thought his voice would break. As it was, he barely managed to give in and stop stroking.

Wilson's hand stilled as well. He lifted it away so House could slide his from his dick. House let his arm rest at his side, then changed his mind and braced both hands on the wall. He felt ridiculous dangling there out in the open, hot flesh throbbing in the cool air.

Wilson had withdrawn slightly to reach into his pocket and pull something out. House opened his eyes as Wilson brought the object forward and around and held it in both hands at House's stomach.

It was the lotion container.

"You brought—" Surprised by how rough he sounded, House cleared his throat and tried again. "You brought it in with you?" Some of the fond pride he felt in Wilson's premeditation seeped into his tone despite his efforts to keep it strictly derisive. He blamed the fact that his brain was only functioning at 20-30% capacity.

"Always prepared," Wilson replied, and House was pleased to hear that his voice was also a little husky. "I wasn't an Eagle Scout for nothing."

That was all the banter House felt capable of, and his dick was going to need attention very soon, so he let Wilson continue in silence.

Chin on House's left shoulder now, still enclosing him in a loose embrace, Wilson unscrewed the jar, scooped out some lotion, closed the container and tossed it to the floor, where it landed with a clack and rolled away in a wobbly curve. House didn't see how far it got because his attention was suddenly focused on Wilson rubbing his hands briskly together—to warm the lotion, he realized—and then wrapping his slick left hand around House's now almost-painful erection. House took a breath and held it.

Wilson began to move with the force and rhythm House had set before. House had no idea how he remembered it so precisely. All he knew was that it felt good. Very, very good. He focused on the pleasure of Wilson's palm and fingers stroking him; it had the side benefit of helping take his mind off the fact that he was feeling far more exposed now that Wilson was touching him directly and far more vulnerable now that he'd relinquished control.

"Good?" Wilson asked at his ear.

House grunted.

They lapsed back into silence as Wilson continued to work at him. When he started pulling slightly harder and faster a few minutes later, House didn't complain.

Wilson's right forearm was pressed against House's ribs with his lotioned hand hovering far enough from his shirt to avoid staining it. Through the fog of arousal, House wondered why he'd bothered rubbing both hands together if one of them was just going to hang there.

His unspoken question was answered soon enough when Wilson slid his arm forward and down and cupped House's balls. House made a noise of appreciation that bled into a second, slightly louder one as Wilson began to gently roll the sac in his palm.

It didn't take long before he found himself thrusting into Wilson's grasp. His fingertips had gone white against the wall and his breath was embarrassingly heavy.

Considering that he'd very recently seen Wilson in the throes of orgasm, though, House figured he didn't need to waste his energy on shame.

That thought brought back the image of Wilson against his office wall, half-sobbing about the death of a boy who'd reminded him of House. Coming into his hand. And that sound he'd made.

Wilson trailed his hand up from House's balls and, without slowing the fervent strokes of his other hand, dragged a fingernail along the slit in his glans.

House's breath caught, then released as he ejaculated into the urinal.

When he was done, he stood with his head bowed, his arms still out straight in front of him, breathing and trying to calm his racing heart.

Wilson let go of him and stepped back. House found that he couldn't turn to look him in the eye. Maybe it was a moot point anyway, because Wilson walked to the sink.

House moved one hand to flush the urinal and kept everything else still. He didn't want to disturb the sleepy mellow afterglow until he absolutely had to, and his leg was probably going to scream bloody murder when he finally moved it after standing in the same position for so long.

Wilson had finished washing his hands, but after he'd dried off House heard him take more paper towels and briefly turn the water on again. He lowered his right arm and straightened in preparation.

Sure enough, Wilson reappeared at his side with a clump of wet towels. "Here," he said.

House took them with a quiet "Thanks." They were warm. He mopped himself clean, or a close approximation thereof, then dropped the wad in the urinal. Lowering his somewhat stiff left arm with a wince, he got himself back into his underwear and jeans and prepared to try to move his legs.

"Here," Wilson said again. This time House turned his head. Once more the image of normalcy, Wilson stood with House's cane in both hands. His eyebrows were slightly raised and his brown eyes were calm.

Wilson's composure calmed him in turn; the niggling anxiety in his chest and coincident urge to laugh subsided. He didn't think he would have reacted as well if he'd detected worry or pity or blatant affection in that gaze.

Without looking away, House reached out and took his cane. He didn't break their gaze until he leaned most of his weight on the cane and tentatively bent his right knee.

It didn't feel fantastic, but it wasn't as bad as he'd feared. Probably mitigated by the orgasm. He flexed it a few more times to make sure it wouldn't cramp or collapse under him, then shifted his weight to it and stretched his left leg.

"How is it?" Wilson asked.

"Need a Vicodin," he said, because it was true and because it would prolong this tranquillity. "Did you stash my pill bottle in your pants too?"

Wilson shook his head, but House's comment must have reminded him about the other item he'd had in his pocket, because he turned around in search of the lotion container on the floor.

"There," House said when he spotted it under the far sink. Wilson went to fetch it.

House made his way over to the counter. He was achy, but it was nothing a Vicodin or two wouldn't take care of soon enough. He washed his hands for what felt like the tenth time that night.

Wilson came back and leaned against the counter, offering House the choice of looking at the back of his head in the mirror or his face right beside him.

"What now?" Wilson asked.

Half a dozen random and incompatible scenarios flashed through House's mind: the two of them walking down the hall unable to think of anything to say; making out on his couch in front of the TV; continuing to meet for lunch and movies and intrude in each other's personal and professional lives as if nothing had happened; jerking each other off again in an exam room in the middle of the day; avoiding each other at work until his fellows demanded to know what was going on; getting drunk and fucking in his bed.

"Dunno," he said, blinking away that last image with some difficulty. It was too soon, and he was too tired, for complex extrapolation.

"Well, you'd better come back to my office at least. Your stuff's still in there."

House grunted, staring into the middle distance. Then he straightened and regarded Wilson head to toe. "You'll probably want to hit the showers," he said. "You stink." It wasn't strictly true (though there was a vague muskiness about him), but the man had to have felt at least as sticky as he did, and Wilson had been sweating more.

Wilson smirked. "I'm not the only one."

"I smell of soap and girly hand lotion that I hope to soon be complementing with the faint but unmistakable aroma of Vicodin," House declared, knowing Wilson wouldn't protest that Vicodin had no scent. He walked to the door.

Wilson caught up and fell into step with him a few feet into the hallway. "You rent anything good for the weekend?"

"Nope; haven't sent the last batch back yet. Don't you have dead people paperwork?"

"It can wait until Monday."

House glanced over to find that Wilson was already looking at him hopefully. "I TiVo'd the whole week's worth of General Hospital. A six-pack and a pizza will earn you a couch cushion all to yourself."

House didn't miss the spark of—delight? relief?—in Wilson's eyes. So he hadn't been the only one wondering whether anything had changed tonight.

"Conte's?" Wilson asked.

"Extra cheese and pepperoni."

"Done."

"Good. I'm starving."

They reached Wilson's office. House opened the unlocked door himself, flicked on the light and went straight for the pills in his jacket.

Wilson closed the door behind them. "Just give me a minute to tidy up," he said.

House decided to take only one Vicodin. After he'd swallowed it and slipped the container back into his pocket, he sat on the couch and passed his cane from one hand to the other between his legs.

As Wilson neatened his desk, House took a quiet breath and sought an answer to the question that had been pressing at him for a while now. "Are we gonna do this every time you have a bad day?"

The sound of papers shuffling paused for a moment, then resumed. "That would be up to you, wouldn't it?"

No way was Wilson going to foist the decision on him without first revealing his opinion. "You did half the work," he shot back.

Wilson tapped a pile of folders against his blotter to line up the edges. "I...wouldn't be opposed to doing this again," he said at last. It was clear from his tone that that was a gross understatement. House had his answer.

He weighed the potential advantages of such an arrangement against the possibility of screwing things up irrevocably between them. The myriad scenarios in which they might find themselves sooner or later flashed through his head again. He nodded. "Okay."

"Okay," Wilson echoed. He opened and shut a desk drawer and pushed in his chair. "I'm done here. I have a change of clothes in my car."

"Why am I not surprised?" House said as he got up and put on his jacket and backpack.

Wilson likewise donned his suit jacket and slung his briefcase over his shoulder. He gestured for House to precede him out the door.

Wilson locked his office while House got a head start down the hallway. They walked to the elevator, waited, and rode down in silence. The reception area was empty and Cuddy's office dark. They crossed the room and pushed open the glass doors at the entrance.

On the cement path out front, Wilson turned to House. "We don't only have to do it on bad days," he ventured. He followed that up with a quirky little smile.

House didn't smile back, but he could feel his lips twitch and the muscles around his eyes relax. "Go get dinner," he said.

Wilson's smile broadened. "See you back at your place."

House watched him walk off to his car. Then he turned and started towards the handicapped spaces, swinging his keys once in his left hand.


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x-posted to [livejournal.com profile] slashfest and [livejournal.com profile] house_wilson.
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Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 02:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gandolforf.livejournal.com
Not bad, normally I don't like NC17 H/W, but this was done rather well. Good job.

<:3D~

Date: Aug. 14th, 2006 11:28 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Thanks -- glad you liked it even if this category isn't usually your cup of tea.

Fic: A Helping Hand part two

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 02:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rosewillread.livejournal.com
Oh, Yeah!
I love the way it ended, them not quite sure of their footing, but sure of the path they were heading for.
And House trying to think of Cameron was good.
And Wilson being able to take just enough of step forward that House could go the right direction.
And the right level of awkwardness again, with House's insecurity and Wilson expression lacking pity or affection.

Re: Fic: A Helping Hand part two

Date: Aug. 14th, 2006 11:30 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
not quite sure of their footing, but sure of the path they were heading for.

And now I have an image of them walking arm-and-arm into the sunset. The hideous purply-pink sunset of season two's rooftop scenes. Oh dear.

Anyhow, thank you, and thanks as always for pointing out what you liked in particular. Will reply soon to your other comment as well.

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 03:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] leaper182.livejournal.com
This was a very pleasant way of starting the day. :D

First off, I rather like that this isn't *entirely* unusual, even if it might be a personal record for Wilson. I did like, however, that the 17yo kid was the one that reminded Wilson of House, and losing that patient in itself would be particularly depressing.

The sex wasn't omg breaking-furniture hawt, but the kind that takes its time, and is more comforting. On the flipside, with Wilson helping House, it wasn't curiosity (at least that's not how it read to me), but it was returning the favor. Of course he wound find House beating off in the john. Of course he'd help. I don't think Wilson would just let him keep going without doing something. With Wilson standing behind him, House doesn't have to look at him, and while Wilson is the one that turned him on, it shows remarkable empathy in that House might not *want* to see him do this, but can let himself be helped this way. He doesn't have to see Wilson's pity or worry or anything like that. When Wilson figured out the rhythm, only he would insist on taking over from House, because that's something I see Wilson doing.

***

Half a dozen random and incompatible scenarios flashed through House's mind: the two of them walking down the hall unable to think of anything to say; making out on his couch in front of the TV; continuing to meet for lunch and movies and intrude in each other's personal and professional lives as if nothing had happened; jerking each other off again in an exam room in the middle of the day; avoiding each other at work until his fellows demanded to know what was going on; getting drunk and fucking in his bed.

If it weren't for all of the negative bits, like avoiding each other, this would sound like a checklist. Of course, they could have a big fight about something, and then avoid each other, but I still like the idea of this as a checklist, so I'll run with that.

Mmmm. Making out on the couch.

***

House glanced over to find that Wilson was already looking at him hopefully. "I TiVo'd the whole week's worth of General Hospital. A six-pack and a pizza will earn you a couch cushion all to yourself."

House didn't miss the spark of—delight? relief?—in Wilson's eyes. So he hadn't been the only one wondering whether anything had changed tonight.


Of course Wilson wouldn't miss it either. They're intelligent people.

AKA, I like this part too. :D

***

Wilson tapped a pile of folders against his blotter to line up the edges. "I...wouldn't be opposed to doing this again," he said at last. It was clear from his tone that that was a gross understatement. House had his answer.

I could hear Wilson saying that on the show. Oh, yes. :D

***

On the cement path out front, Wilson turned to House. "We don't only have to do it on bad days," he ventured. He followed that up with a quirky little smile.

House didn't smile back, but he could feel his lips twitch and the muscles around his eyes relax. "Go get dinner," he said.

Wilson's smile broadened. "See you back at your place."


I love how Wilson can read him so well. Even if I like them as House/Wilson, it shows how close they are as friends. :D

***

So, all in all, lovely fic. Added to memories happily, and I'd love to see House and Wilson making out on the couch, but that's just me talking, and by no means is it a demand for more. :D

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 02:27 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Oh, I love long comments, thank you. (They're just a little scary when you need to reply to them.)

It's wonderful to hear that you got so much out of the story. There's no greater satisfaction than to know that readers are picking up on what you spent so much time working into the story, or that they're finding even more than you consciously intended.

Deciding that Wilson has had bad days before was a big help in constructing this fic. It wasn't until after I'd claimed the prompt that I realized how difficult it would be to keep everything in character and explain why Wilson was so upset. It couldn't just be that he'd lost patients, because he must lose them fairly often, given his line of work and his position in the hospital, and we know that he's not easily shaken. That's where the young patient who reminded him of House came in.

When Wilson figured out the rhythm, only he would insist on taking over from House, because that's something I see Wilson doing.

Yes. And only for Wilson would House consent, I think.

If it weren't for all of the negative bits, like avoiding each other, this would sound like a checklist.

That's actually why I put many of the negative/neutral items in there -- it wasn't supposed to be House fantasizing about what else they should do that weekend, but rather him imagining all the potential consequences of pursuing a "relationship" beyond what they already have. Of course, I totally agree that he ought to treat the makeout and exam room naughtiness and drunken sex as a to-do list.

I love how Wilson can read him so well. Even if I like them as House/Wilson, it shows how close they are as friends.

One of the joys of writing House/Wilson, I am finding, is how much you can play with nonverbal communication and dialogue subtext. Thanks to HL & RSL's brilliant chemistry on-screen, it's easy to imagine how these exchanges would go in fic; the challenge is then to describe how the characters intuit so much without readers being able to see the eyesex and subtle expressions and gestures and hear the undertones to the words. So I'm glad it came through in this story.

I'd love to see House and Wilson making out on the couch, but that's just me talking, and by no means is it a demand for more.

Oh, there will be more, fear not. And if all goes as planned, there will be kissage. *checks* Yes, it was you who went back and read about that UST dream I had; I would like to give that a whirl soon.

Thanks for reading and for your extensive and enjoyable comment!

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Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 03:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] firestorm717.livejournal.com
Oh, this was quite delicious ^_^ I like how you wrote their awkwardness and the way House tried to distance himself from everything by thinking about it precisely, clinically, even though he was the one who suggested it first. And of course, forcing the truth out of Wilson about the patients was a lovely little Freudian trick too, hehe.

This was definitely my favorite line *grin*

'Patented skin rejuvenation formula with shea butter and aloe extract for unequaled softness,'" House read from the lotion label. "I take it back. This doesn't mean I'm gay."

Oh, just FYI, frought = fraught. But that was the only typo I could find XP.

Date: Aug. 14th, 2006 08:38 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Hooray. I'm glad you noticed and enjoyed House's attempts to watch Wilson without getting emotionally or sexually involved. Poor deluded man. Poor deluded both of them.

I like that line too. One of the few that I still knew was funny after having read it a dozen times.

And thanks -- I fixed the typo, along with another one that I found (a couple of words left over from a change in phrasing). Next time maybe I'll remember to run spell check. Or finish the fic far enough ahead of any deadlines that a beta can look it over.

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 03:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bitter-crimson.livejournal.com
*claps and cheers*

Very nice, very realistic. You got their voices down very well, and I especially loved the awkwardness of the sex. (Kink!) The both of them using their non-dominant hands being my favorite little bit. Wooooooo.

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 12:09 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Glad to have hit the right note for you. Also glad you liked the bit about Wilson having used his right hand -- apart from the blocking standpoint (Wilson couldn't have laced their fingers together as easily if it'd been his left hand and House's right), it was a convenient way of suggesting that Wilson would make himself uncomfortable without complaint to bring House a little pleasure.

Thanks for commenting!

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 03:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rivers-bend.livejournal.com
I really liked that. Awkward, touching, funny sweet and sad. But with an uplifting ending.

Great House and Wilson voices and the differential seemed accurate and well done.

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 12:13 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Thanks -- it's so nerve-wracking to post a story and wait to find out whether their dialogue works and the medicine is believable without distracting from the main plot. I'm glad you enjoyed the mix of emotions too. Thanks for commenting!

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 03:29 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] bell
....

I'd like to preface this comment by saying that I've been having trouble reading House fic lately, particularly H/W-- I don't know if it's because I'm too wrapped up in writing my own fic, or because I'm tired of the recurring themes in fandom, or if it's simply because there hasn't been anything good lately.

I also know that you struggled/were worried with getting the characters into the scenario. Well. Your efforts paid off, especially once the 'how do we get House to offer Wilson a hanjob?' hurdle was passed. From there on in it all went beautifully, and I believed every bit.

For example, House was talkative and invasive (asking about the patients, cracking jokes, etc) when he was jerking off Wilson and had nothing to lose. Once he himself was in a vulnurable position- wanting that attention back- he became reticent, and Wilson respected that. We can see how carefully he approaches House, not because he himself is worried about rejection but because House is uncomfortable with his arousal. This is just so true of them.

It's also an interesting reversal of their relationship. Usually Wilson is the one who gives, and gives, and gives; House needs. And for once House didn't want to need.

Plus, you know, it's not that you hit any of my particular kinks, but the set-up was precisely the kind I enjoy. One incident reveals mutual attraction between a couple of friends, and things go from there. And there was just the right mixture of smut with character development. Their porn- actions highlighted the characterization. That, to me, is incredibly hot.

Wilson getting worked up over the patient that reminded him of House, and then coming as he mentions him deserves a FADFAKJDLIAEJFAKDF mention. Not to mention that you pulled off House calling him "Jimmy." That's the first time I could begin to accept that. Still a bit iffy on it, but I can see it.

In short, me enjoy muchly. :3

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 08:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hellspoette.livejournal.com
Plus, you know, it's not that you hit any of my particular kinks, but the set-up was precisely the kind I enjoy. One incident reveals mutual attraction between a couple of friends, and things go from there. And there was just the right mixture of smut with character development. Their porn- actions highlighted the characterization. That, to me, is incredibly hot.

I really couldn't have said it better myself. At first I thought the awkwardness of the situation was going to make this not-hot (if still an intriguing read), but I found it surprisingly, er... enticing, for precisely those reasons.

And as I'm too lazy to post a separate comment, I shall continue feedback here. AERTRALGTJASWFTLKSKS indeed. This was well-paced, well-written, and somehow completely in-character, a completely reasonable scenario following many of the S2 events. I think the only thing that woulda made it better (for me, because I'm a weirdo) is if they'd run into Cuddy as they were leaving. I just love to see those awkward moments of how they'd handle themselves in front of a third, familiar party after such a potentially paradigm-shifting turn of events.

Either way, I loved loved loved this. I believed the whole thing, and it's only too easy to imagine this happening in the context of the show (if only it were aired on HBO). Wooooo.

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Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 03:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] babyinthecorner.livejournal.com
Wow! I went on vacation for six weeks and was without Internet access, and this is this first fic I've read since I got home a couple days ago. I LOVED this, especially Wilson!

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 12:14 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Wow, you must be in serious House fic withdrawal. I went away for two weeks this summer and couldn't wait to find out what I'd missed. Glad to be your return-home-fic! Wilson = love.

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 04:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nogah.livejournal.com
I like it a lot.

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 12:15 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Glad to hear it! Thanks for commenting.

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 04:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deelaundry.livejournal.com
I'm feeling a little fuzzy headed right now, so this won't be particularly coherent. Just, um, yay, that was great. *mems*

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 12:15 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Ha, your icon in this context.

Glad you liked!

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 06:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] eruthiadwen.livejournal.com
Loooooooooooooove it. :)

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 12:16 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
How splendid! Thanks for commenting.

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 06:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] petrichor-fizz.livejournal.com
Sweet fancy Moses!

Great fic. Sequel?

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 12:16 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Ha. Thank you. I don't know about a sequel, but there will definitely be more House/Wilson fic in the future.

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 06:53 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] daisylily.livejournal.com
Lovely. You have the voices just right, and it was all totally believable.

::is happy::

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 12:25 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Two of the hardest things to accomplish -- so it's very nice to know you found it in character on both counts. And glad to make you happy! Thanks for commenting.

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 07:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fallen-arazil.livejournal.com
Awkward and yet oddly sweet. It's interesting to see House's mouth getting away from him--I got the impression that he made the offer withotu really thinking it through, in an attempt to get Wilson to stop being upset, and the fact that he followed through with it despite that shows that he either a) wanted it himself or b) just cares about Wilson that much. Either way, it made me happy.

Plus, Wilson comment about being an Eagle scout? Dude, he so totally was. XD I can even picture him in the bloody uniform. (of course, it bers a vague resemblemse to the HJ uniform he wore in Swing Kids, so ...)

Anyway, this story was sweet, and you managed to capture both the awkwardness of their sudden intimacy and the sweetness that lying right under the surface. It was very well executed.

~Djinn

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 12:36 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Thank you. (I hope your first reference to the story's awkwardness referred to the situation and not the writing!)

I think House did want it himself but didn't realize it or wouldn't let himself realize it, so making the snap decision helped him get where he wanted to be even though he could rationalize it in a thousand other ways. Denial is a beautiful thing. Luckily Wilson was there to follow through when he tried to retreat.

Wilson was, indeed, utterly and totally an Eagle Scout. Such a good boy. We just need to decide what his special project was. Probably something in a nursing home or, heck, in a cancer ward.

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 07:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] private-syntax.livejournal.com
I'm adding this to my favorites. By far, one of the most believable and in-character H/W stories I've read where the relationship starts as canon and then realistically progresses to the next level. Very believable, and the complexity and myriad of emotions portrayed was excellent.

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 12:39 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Thanks so much -- that's a really lovely comment. I think stories that tackle the transition from their platonic friendship to a romantic or sexual relationship need to cover an array of emotions. Our boys are quite complicated.

Date: Aug. 13th, 2006 09:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] extrabitter.livejournal.com
Was this the prompt you were having trouble with a few weeks ago? It turned out pretty well, considering some of what you said about your thoughts on the prompt itself.

I liked your character voices throughout, particularly in the beginning. I don't completely buy the idea (from the prompt) that Wilson would be quite that distraught over fairly ordinary patient deaths, and I had a couple of medical questions (like, how they managed to clear bacterial endocarditis in one day without surgery,) but by the end, I wasn't concerned about those questions at all.

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 12:59 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
This is the one, yes. It grew quite a bit after I posted that question, and then doubled again from Friday to Saturday, and now I'm pretty pleased with it, considering. I still think House's decision to help -- the turning point of the fic, the choice on which the entire second "half" hinges -- could be better supported, but again, at least it's a far cry from the early drafts.

I'm glad to hear that you liked the dialogue and that the second part overshadowed the problems you had with the first. Still, I'd prefer if those questions didn't concern you (and probably others) to begin with. See next paragraph.

Good point about the endocarditis. I didn't necessarily mean that it had been diagnosed, treated and healed in 24 hours, but I see exactly where that failed to come across properly. Will try to fix. What were your other questions/quibbles, if I may ask? I'm going to take a sweep through to make some stylistic changes and correct a few continuity errors (e.g. they can't push chairs back if they're sitting in a booth), so if you want to point out your trouble spots, I'd appreciate the opportunity to think them over and incorporate the revisions.

Oh and P.S., I wanted to tell you that I did have House's line about not knowing where Wilson's you-know-what has been before you pointed me to your epic fic in which House asks about STDs etc. on the morning after. I know it's not the most original line in the world, but when I read it in yours, I wanted to make sure you knew that I didn't steal it from you. Or, come to think of it, the endocarditis. Hm. That was all wrongdiagnosis.com's fault for letting me know that it can be a complication of Q fever. I saw "tooth extractions" on the list of possible causes and thought of your story, actually. I guess the more House fic you read, the more similarities you discover among stories. ...Shutting up now before I start to sound really stupid.

Date: Aug. 14th, 2006 12:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] savemoony.livejournal.com
I'm not a smut person for the soul reason I find about 80% of it is just PWP and OOC sex. It lacks soul and taste, in my opinion. So, when I say... That was one of the BEST smut fics I've ever read, and the characterization was exquisite, and the writing was clear and concrete and stellar, I truly, truly mean it. If all smut/NC17 was that character-based, I'd read it.

*Favorited*

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 01:07 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Wow, thank you. I agree with you that sex in fic is best when it reveals something about the characters involved. PWP has its place (OOC smut just drives me nuts), but it's so much more enjoyable and satisfying when the actions and dialogue communicate more than just a path to orgasm. So I'm very glad this fic qualified for you. Thanks for giving it a try, for memory-ing and for commenting!

Date: Aug. 14th, 2006 01:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] nakannalee.livejournal.com
Loved this so much. And I like how you did the ending--it was happy without being sappy and came across as very realistic. Great job... I'm so happy you posted this, I'm a big fan of your writing! :)

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 02:30 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Ah, thank you. Endings are so hard to do well. And yay having a fan! I've been enjoying your HL/RSL fics too -- really need to comment on them one of these days.

Date: Aug. 14th, 2006 01:43 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/jaryn_/
This was great, no OOC'ness despite such a strange set-up/situation. Your descriptions made it all so real as well, and the ending was well done.

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 01:12 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
That's just about the highest compliment I could have hoped for with this fic -- that despite the contrivance, House and Wilson stayed House and Wilson and the story was plausible. So, thank you very much, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Date: Aug. 14th, 2006 01:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] daasgrrl.livejournal.com
GUH. I seem to lack coherency right now. Wait, you were *worried* about this? Despite your concerns about character, I thought House and Wilson were perfect in this - they still have the same relationship, that edge with each other, they've always had. I think the big 'leap of faith' moment here is when House makes his initial offer, and it worked well for me, especially the way they immediately start covering the awkwardness with banter. Your writing is clear and beautiful.

This had everything I love in fanfic, the hot, the clever, the carefully restrained and very male affection. I'm adding to memories and hoping for more H/W from you, definitely :)

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 01:37 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
YOU HAVE NO IDEA HOW MUCH TROUBLE IT WAS TO GET THE FIC TO THIS STATE! Ha ha, oh God. You know, it doubled in size from Friday to Saturday, and that's when I started to really like it. I guess it mostly needed to be longer, and then longer still, for what I had at first to be believable. The medicine and patient-of-the-week didn't go in until Saturday afternoon, and that made a big difference as well. Plus, House and Wilson's conversation in Wilson's office took forever to get right -- I had half a dozen pieces of it all jumbled up and couldn't for the life of me figure out what ought to go where, and had to cut lines that I had grown attached to because they didn't fit with how the story was evolving...

But anyway. I'm so glad to hear that you thought House and Wilson stayed in character, that their moments of intimacy didn't "feminize" them, and especially that the pivotal moment of House's decision didn't break your suspension of disbelief. The turning point from friendship to something more -- the "leap of faith moment," as you so eloquently put it -- is the most critical part of these kinds of stories and I'm still not entirely pleased with how it came out here, but it seems to be working for people and that's really all I can ask.

So thank you for your comment and compliments and memorying and hope for more. Which there will be. Absolutely. As soon as my last [livejournal.com profile] slashfest fic is done at the end of the month.

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Date: Aug. 14th, 2006 03:04 am (UTC)
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Wow, that was amazing. Hot and yet in character.
One thing that's very very small, but it just bugged me. When House joins Wilson in the cafeteria, Wilson's fork is still wrapped in plastic. When Wilson drops his fork onto the table, it creates such a loud clatter that people at other tables turn and look. A plastic fork wouldn't make much of a noise, and a metal fork wouldn't be wrapped in plastic.

Date: Aug. 14th, 2006 08:44 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Re: the fork, it was actually his sandwich that was still wrapped in plastic. I imagine he had a regular metal fork that he was using to eat/poke at his salad on a ceramic plate (the kind House had that time he used a pile of lettuce to hide his steak), which made the clatter.

Date: Aug. 14th, 2006 05:36 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] captain-tulip.livejournal.com
The first chapter was brilliant. I was too incoherent and gobsmacked and utterly impressed to give you a decent and intelligent response - I apologise. You're probably not going to get one now, come to that, but I can at least try and give you one that makes more sense.

Just - brilliant. Fantastic, and perfectly in character and wonderfully timed. I don't know if that makes sense, but the way that you write just flows, and the sentences are well rounded and follow on from each other - argh! Perhaps if I had more knowledge in this area I'd be able to come up with the proper terminology, but all I'm really trying to say is your writing is so bloody enjoyable to read. Your banter was perfect - I'm going to quote this from this first chapter, if I may:

Wilson said, "Did you even ask because you care or did you just want to appease your curiosity?"

House refocused. "Is there a difference?"

Wilson shook his head and picked up his pen again. "It's been a miserable day. I want to finish these and go home."

"So you can be aw awone in your cold, lonely apartment and wallow in your midlife crisis soul-searching?"

"Yes, that's the general idea."

"Well, it's a bad idea. Go out, have a few beers, get laid, do your usual thing, whatever that is. Don't sit in your office brooding. That's my schtick."

"I'm not brooding, I'm doing my job."


Better than the show itself. More true to the characters than the characters themselves. You've really tapped into something here - I don't know what it is (sure as hell wish I did!) but I could feel a sense of giddy excitement bubbling up inside me as I read.

Wilson, head back, eyes closed, sweating, clutching at him, choking out his name. Guh.

"Always prepared," Wilson replied, and House was pleased to hear that his voice was also a little husky. "I wasn't an Eagle Scout for nothing." Guh and *snort*!

You successfully combined hawtness, banter, on-the-dot characterisation, angst and almostfluff and just - mmmfffflibble. I'm nowhere near the leage of your eloquence and amazingness, so I should just shut up now before I embarrass myself. You may think I'm being over the top, and maybe this was just what I needed right now - but whatever it was, it sure hit the spot, and I can't stop grinning. *memories, saves onto computer, adds to list of H/W with giant asterisk beside* :)

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 02:43 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Ah, no need to apologize -- what better reaction than speechlessness? Wait, I can answer that: the kind of hilarious tongue-tied comment that you left after Part One. And the word "mmmfffflibble."

What you said does make sense. Flow is tricky, especially when it takes two bloody weeks to get the fic working properly and you've read it so often you have no idea whether the pacing is too fast or too slow or uneven. A relief to hear that that's one of the elements that struck you.

You know, it's interesting that you chose that exchange as an example of how their banter worked, because that whole conversation -- from when House asks what's wrong with him to "I don't think this is something you can help me with" -- took so long to get right; it was all in bits and pieces and I kept scrambling them to see what might work best, and wasn't sure how it turned out, again because I'd read it all so often.

Better than the show itself. More true to the characters than the characters themselves. You've really tapped into something here - I don't know what it is (sure as hell wish I did!) but I could feel a sense of giddy excitement bubbling up inside me as I read.

That is such a nice thing to say. Wow. Also, I love that feeling you're talking about. It's all too rare. To know that this fic sparked it in you makes me really happy.

Guh. Uh huh. Some of those House-fantasizing-about-Wilson lines still make me go all fluttery too.

Oh, and since you mentioned you saved this to your computer (*is flattered*), you may want to know that I'm planning on doing a quick second pass through the fic to make some stylistic changes and a couple of continuity error corrections and possibly an alteration to the medicine in one or two places. Nothing big, but if you like I can let you know when that's done so you can replace your file with the new version.

P.S. I know I offered to show you this a few weeks ago when the Remus/Sirius beta turned out to be a non-job, but I couldn't ask anyone to look this monster over on such short notice. So, perhaps next time.

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Date: Aug. 14th, 2006 06:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] krippity.livejournal.com
ok so that was really really good. i loved it.

it was just so real in my mind.

more?

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 02:44 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Thanks! I'm glad it came across as believable. There is definitely more H/W on the horizon, though probably not related to this particular story.

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Date: Aug. 14th, 2006 06:27 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annaisanomalous.livejournal.com
*is rendered momentarily speechless*

that was really, just wow (still incoherent)

let's just say i loved it

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 02:45 am (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Let's just say, thank you! Glad to have rendered you speechless.

Date: Aug. 14th, 2006 07:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] imsanehonest.livejournal.com
I thought this story was lovely on so many levels (not the least of which was the smut... *fans self*), but the one I'm most astounded by is how you've managed to make a House/Wilson romantic relationship develop in a way that is remarkably cannon.

Now don't get me wrong; I love House/Wilson to pieces. (Certainly one of my favorite ships, with some damn good fanfiction out there. *grin*) But for all of that, I find myself puzzling over ways that two straight men (which is predominantly how I see them in cannon-land, some 'eye-sex' moments excluded) could realistically 'hook-up.' Of course, what House and Wilson have is deeper than the average friendship, but it is still a pretty large leap from a full-blown sexual relationship.

And then, you present this lovely gem, and I wonder no more. *grin*

Thank you for a wonderful read!

Date: Aug. 15th, 2006 07:51 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] bironic.livejournal.com
Thank you for your comment! I'm really glad to hear that what impressed you most was the portrayal of the progression of their relationship. That first turning point was the hardest part of writing this, made all the more challenging because the story had to fit the prompt, and right up until posting it I was still unsure about whether House's decision to help Wilson really worked. Those two are so tricky to write! And yet the whole framework for setting up a relationship is right there on the show; it's only ("only"!) a matter of playing with the canon subtleties and innuendo and finding a not-too-contrived plot device that propels them into taking things a step or two further.

If you think about it, it's kind of funny that all of us H/W slashers notice all that sexual tension between House and Wilson on the show and see how they could work as a couple rather than just a pair of friends, and yet it's so hard to find and create fic that depicts that transition believably.
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